The Best Short Story Ever

"The Best Short Story Ever."Well actually that might be an OVERSTATEMENT but that's why I need your help. You could be the one to make my short story a better, if not the best short story ever. We had to write a jack tale and well, here's a look into mine.

AB- The Affronted Bee:
The day continued on like it had begun. No bee made a snide comment towards Jr. It was like they had all been transformed; and Jr. could not have liked it any other way. His days were getting better at Beecker’s Academy; even Jinx was beginning to take note. There was a sudden swiftness in Jr.’s movement she had never felt before. It was absolute bliss, for a while.

If you think that's semi-interesting, then that's great. If you'd like to read the whole shebang, then that's even better. Just email me stellargurl93[at]aim[dot]com and I'll send it to you, in hopes that I will get some feed back. So hop on the wagon, if you want, and help my short story be the best. I would greatly appreciated your input. Thanks.